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mmmm

I just got back on newgrounds for the first time in like a year and dude, this is what it's all about. Thanks for reminding me what I've been missing!

Patrick

DavidOrr responds:

Welcome back!!

Don't stop here though- there's a LOT of wonderful music in the AP :)

Have I ever mentioned that you're the man?

Epic programmatic music. This is orchestral music gone pop as a result of movies like Lord of the Rings. I am certainly a fan of the style, and it's not too hard to sound good doing it, in my opinion. However, it is also very clear when someone knows what they're doing. And as we all know, you are a master. There is great depth in this song. Unlike so much other music on Newgrounds, there are actually more parts here than I can pick out. The top 1% of composers make up for all the crap that goes up on the site. Thank you for raising the standards.

Patrick

This is what is known as Great Success!

Alright, first off, name it 'Rugged Rainbow'. It's pretty crazy, no doubt, but I can still feel what it's all about. Don't give up on it, not when you've already done so much. Let's see... I really like what you have so far, up to the last few seconds which sound incomplete and probably are. I guess to keep going forward I would just ask you to keep mixing up the instrumentation. You could pretty much use anything at this point, like acoustic guitar? Bass has already been addressed; I'd just like more of that. Maybe a vocalist?
Get a really low alto to sing this:

Dancing in the rain, water doesn't stain
Let the light surround me, onto the refrain
Wrestle with a cloud, falling down below
All you get is a rugged rainbow

It'll be a winner, I promise.

alternativesolution responds:

Hey, Patrick! Those are wonderful lyrics. Although I can't really see them fitting into this particular song, there's a high chance I might use them in another song. It's just that I can't seem to merge them together. If you are able to record yourself saying/singing the lyrics, it'd be helpful if you can send it to me, just so I can get how you're seeing it.
You're right.. I might add some acoustic guitar in the middle. That'd go.
Anyway, I'm really glad you liked it :D
Two super reviews have got me hyped!
Now I'm probably going to do some major work on it this week..hopefully finish it.

Percussion FTW

You just got a 10 from a trombonist. That's when you know you've done it! A ballad percussion feature. I've tried to write for percussion, but it's just too hard. I think that you have to have studied it before you can write good parts for it. We play songs at my school by great composers that just don't know what they're doing on the percussion parts. They'll write out of the instrument's range or just write things that aren't practical. We need more percussion composers in the world. Only complaint is the ending. I'd rather have it end right at 2:38. The rest isn't as good as the beginning (especially the clapping). Overall, good work man!

~Patrick~

First composition? Great!

Hey, cool! I took AP Music theory last year. What was the assignment? I don't write a lot of reviews, but your comments caught my eye. Yeah, Silmarillion, I should read that again. I just had to read The Hobbit for my Mythology class. I write all my music on Finalo 2007 so there's another connection I made with this song lol.

There's a lot of music on this site that sounds like a 10 year old just typed random stuff into finale notepad. But you're studying theory, so thats good to see. Finally onto the critique: The instrumentation fits the style and is well used. I would make the opening tuba part move a little bit. You use rests very effectively, like at 0:58. That build into a complete break is nice. The use of timpini at like 1:20 is also good. The dissonance at 1:54 is good. Let's see... what would make it better? At 2:16, I would put all the low parts on the root so that you get the effect of the high parts on the m3, and then all the lows on 1. Idk, I'd like that better. I'm not a big fan of the repetition at 2:30- 2:40. Change it up a little bit. And on the last note, trumpet up the octave man! It's the climax, don't wus out on it.
Overall, Great. A year of theory has done you well. First composition and a great success. Not perfect, but I like it. 5/5

~Patrick~

Vexorian responds:

Thanks for the review!

It was our project for the last 9-weeks.. Which was our only grade. And the objective was to use everything we know to compose a 3 minute composition. Being any style we wanted as long as we could explain it.

Yeah, I know there were certain parts that could have been a bit different but at the time I had time constraints to where I only could work on it at certain times, so I basically just had to finish it. Like the ending was the "I-have-to-end-this" ending.

Personal Favorite

Your best work! Of course I am biased because I like this style more than the other songs you wrote, but even so, it's good. Obviously repetitive, but thats alright. Critique? Let it grow. Start with less and end with more. All your music stays at the same level. Let it change over time. It peaks at 1:41 and that's my favorite part, but It doesn't do anything more. Keep going, keep growing until it gets out of control, then let it come back down. Finally, at the very end you have the piano end on the minor 6th. Nooo!!! Sorry, I just didn't really like that. Do something else with the piano lol.

~Patrick~

alternativesolution responds:

The song isn't going to change, this is the final version. But thanks for the input! :)

Just okay.

Alright, let me get this down straight away. It sounds like the same beat as Clossed Off. Not that that's necessarily a bad thing, but i personally would rather hear something different. And the rest of the song just isnt as good as that song was. Make the percussion softer and add more to the melody to keep it interesting. Not your best work.

alternativesolution responds:

I did use similar instruments in both songs, maybe that's why you think they are the same.

Unique and good.

You know how to effectively use your percussion instruments. Personally, I would add more to the piano part, just because I love piano. It all works well together and makes sense. When strings randomly show up, you don't question it because it just makes sense. Like I said, the highlight was the percussion.

alternativesolution responds:

Thanks!

Yeah, okay. Cool.

It's fun, I like it. Doesn't really go anywhere, it's pretty static. That's what's restraining it from something awesome. But yeah, I agree. For like a main menu in a game, this is great because you don't want something awesome, lol. Just some good background music. And this succeeds in that regard.

In some of your music the melody doesn't always match up with the chords, but in this case, I don't really feel that that detracts from the piece. Good simple drums, but keep the bass moving and interesting. Don't let it just stay on the root.

Overall, I like it.

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